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高考英语读后续写写作技巧及方法指导

日期:2023-03-17 10:29 点击:


Part1读后续写考情分析

 

"读后续写"是高考英语中新增加的一种写作题型,从2016年开始应用于高考综合改革试点省份的高考中、并且将随着高考综合改革试点的推广在全国范围内使用。在将来,越来越多的学生将会在高考英语中遇到读后续写这种题型。在开始学习如何进行读后续写之前,让我们先来了解一下读后续写这类写作题型的具体要求。

要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上,充分调动想象创新思维,大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势,进行充满个性色彩的设计,并用英语进行续写表达。所提供短文词数在350左右,划线词语涉及到名词(词组)、动词(词组)、介词(词组)和形容词等,其中,以名词(词组)为主,在续写中至少要使用5个关键词语,需要注意:在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要,可以改变动词的形式,可以改变名词的单复数,但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含义和词性;多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主,故事情节有曲折、有起伏,但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。

 

1.创造性:即发挥想象力,该题型具有一定的开放性,考生需用自己的语言对故事情节进行内容创造;

2.逻辑性:即根据已提供的关键信息,按照可能的合理的方向续写,使文章逻辑结构完整;

3.丰富性:即语言能力的充分体现,词汇句法的准确与复杂程度,细节描写的生动性等都将让故事更加立体饱满。

 

1.读后续写题型解读

到目前为止,已经有许多省份在高考英语中开始了对读后续写的考查。下面我们以2017年6月浙江省高考真题为例,一起来分析一下读后续写的考查重点。

阅读下面的短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.

Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.

Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).

Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.

At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;

4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph1:

The car abruptly stopped in front of him.

                                    

Paragraph2:

Afewminuteslater,the other two cyclists arrived.

 

从2017年浙江省高考真题中我们可以发现,读后续写的考试形式与教育部考试中心颁布的《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明》(高考综合改革试验省份试用)中的描述相同,提供了一段350词以内的语言材料(体裁多以记叙文为主),故事没有结束但是留有线索,让考生得以缘写文章。题目要求考生根据已经给出的故事信息,结合已经写好的两个开头语,应用材料中5个以上标有下划线的关键词语,完成一篇约150词的作文(150词不包括已给出的两段的开头语)。

读后续写不是让考生毫无依据地编故事,而是要求考生在读懂原文的基础上,找到原文给出的线索,然后用丰富、准确的语言完成一篇与原文紧密结合的读后续写作文。总体来说,

 

2.读后续写写作特点

在进行读后续写时有以下几点需要考生注意∶

①重在描述

读后续写的重点在于情节描述。描述过程中应加入更多的具体动作和情感描写,用具体动作代模地名表达。同学们往往比较擅长写"结论性"语言,例如"Shefeltreallynervousand…"样的句子虽然在语法上没有错误,但是且按用形容词来表达会导致续写只呈现抽象的结论,而没有"画面械"、不会给读者留下深刻的印象。所以,同"们在进行读后续写时,一定要注重描述,讲究生动和画面感。本书第二章中为大家提供了一些用来描述情绪和动作的高频词(短语),希望大家能学以致用。

②关注语言

在高考英语写作中,考生所采用的句型结构在一定程度上会影响阅卷老师对考生写作水平的判断。考生尤其应该避免句型单一化、如通篇使用定语从句,因为这样会让阅卷老师觉得考生对各种句型掌握得不够充分。考生在进行读后续写时应该有意识地多使用不同的句型结构和语法点,比如非谓语、形容词作状语、虚拟语气等。本书第三章中对这些相关语法点进行了讲解。

 

③注意衔接

由于阅卷老师的阅卷时间十分有限,所以考生一定要在作文中使用清晰的逻辑衔接词,这样可以帮助老师快速抓住文章结构,促使老师更好地理解文章主旨,同时也可以显示出考生写作时严谨的逻辑。在读后续写当中,时间线索串联最为重要,例如uponone'sarrival、then、however、besides、while等衔接词,能够为文章提供明确的时间线索,很好地承接上下文,同学们在日常学习中应该多多积累。

④正向结局

从情节上来看,历年真题多以户外经历为主。考生需要注意设计的结局应是正向的化险为夷。例如,浙江省2016年11月的高考读后续写真题中讲述了简和丈夫野营时因吵架而走散迷路的故事,这个故事的结局应设计为简最终获救了;2017年6月的高考读后续写真题中讲述了马克和朋友骑车去阿拉斯加,朋友由于车坏而停下修车,马克单独前行却在途中遇到狼的故事,这个故事的结局应是马克最终成功脱险;2017年11月的高考读后续写真题中讲述了作者一家四口去祖父母家乡自驾旅游,作者的母亲很健忘,但结局应是由于母亲的健忘,途中发生了有趣的事情;2018年6月的高考读后续写真题中讲述了作者和父亲去西部荒原度假时骑马游玩、却在途中迷路的故事,结局应是作者和父亲平安找到了路。同学们在写作时一定要抓住文中线索,把握好故事发展方向。

对于读后续写这样的写作题型,同学们平时一定要多积累好词好句,进行大量的句子翻译练习,并且找到合适的写作步骤,这样才能在考场上有限的时间内完成一篇高分作文。

 

3.读后续写写作流程

为了让大家更好地理解,我们还是以2017年6月浙江省高考真题为例,梳理一下读后续写的写作步骤∶

①通读故事,梳理已知情节

材料中讲述了马克和朋友骑车去阿拉斯加,朋友由于车坏而停下修车,马克单独前行但是却在途中遇到狼的故事。

 

②对续写情节的大致走向作出判断

以正向结局为原则,本文的结局应设计为马克最终成功脱险。

③根据题目已知开头语确定文章类型

题目中给出的第一段开头是"这辆车突然停到他面前",明显属于故事描述。接下来考生必然需要描述车停在马克面前,马克如何上车脱险。第二段的开头是"几分钟后,另外两个自行车骑手到了",接下来可以写马克与朋友分享这次经历,并继续这次旅行,所以也可以处理成故事描写。

④梳理续写思路,选取下划线词汇及语法结构

第一段续写思路可以为;这辆车突然停到他面前(开头语);保罗打开车门让马克上车;马克扔下自行车,冲上汽车;狼终于离开。

第二段续写思路可以为∶几分钟后,另外两个自行车骑手到了(开头语);他们看到马克的自行车,听他讲述了这次经历;休息后,马克感谢了帮助他的人,与朋友们继续上路;一路上马克十分想念他的妻子和孩子,他想尽快跟他们分享这次旅程的经历。

 

范文欣赏

Paragraph 1:

The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed to the door of the car. But before Mac could open the door, the wolf had caught up and jumped to attack. Luckily, the magic spray saved Mac a third time. Seeing the wolf back off, Paul quickly unlocked the door, and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time, shutting the door behind him heavily. Becky looked out of the back window and saw the wolf standing over Mac’s bicycle as if it were a kill. Soon after, the animal ran off.

Paragraph 2:

A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Mac got out of the car and hugged his friends. “It was really a nightmare and I thought I was going to die,” said Mac in a shaky voice, tears gathering in his eyes. For him, life could never be more beautiful. After saying goodbye to Paul and Becky with gratitude, the three men continued their trip, agreeing never to separate again.

 

 

Part2读后续写评分标准、原则及解读

 

1.读后续写评分标准(新高考卷:七档)

第七档(

———创造了丰富、合理 的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情 境融洽度高:

———使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错 误很少,且完全不影响理解:

———自然有效地使用了段落间、句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰 ,前后呼应,意义连贯。

第六档(

———创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完 整,与 原文情境融洽度较高:

———使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有 个 别 错误,但不影响理解:

———比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段 ,全文结构比较清晰 ,意义比较连贯。

第五档(

———创造 了 基 本 合 理 的 内 容 ,有 一 定 的 逻 辑 性,续 写 基 本 完 整 ,与 原 文 情境相关:

———使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达方式不够多 样 性,表 达 有 些许错误,但基本不影响理解:

———使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯。

 

第四档(

———创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不够合理或 逻 辑 性 不 强,与原文情境基本相关:

———使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误和不 恰 当 之 处,个 别部分影响理解:

———尚有语句衔接的意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯。

第三档(

———内容和逻辑上有一些 重大问题,续 写不够完整,与 原 文 有 一 定 程 度 脱节:

———所用的词汇有限,语法结构单调,错误较多且比较低级,影响理解:

———未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不够清晰,意义欠连贯。

第二档(

———内容和 逻 辑 上 有 较 多 重 大 问 题 ,或 有 部 分 内 容 抄 自 原 文 ,续 写 不 完整,与原文情境基本脱节:

———所使用的词汇非常有限,语法结构单调,错误极多,严重影响理解:

———几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段,全文结构不清晰,意义不连贯。

第一档

———未作答:所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判:所写内 容 全 部 抄 自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。

2.读后续写评分标准(浙江卷:五档)

第五档(

—与所给短文融洽度高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。

—内容丰富,应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

—所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但完全不会影响意义表达。

—有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。

第四档(

—与所给短文融洽度较高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。

—内容比较丰富,应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

—所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确,可能有些许错误,但不会影响意义表达。

—比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分,使所续写短文结构紧凑。

第三档(

—与所给短文关系较为密切,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。

—写出了若干有关内容,应用了4个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

—应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求,虽有一些错误,但不影响意义表达。

—应用简单的语句间连接成分,使全文内容连贯。

第二档(

—与所给短文有一定的关系,与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。

—写出了一些有关内容,应用了3个以上短文中标出的关键词语。

—语法结构单调,词汇项目有限,有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误,影响了意义的表达。

—较少使用语句间的连接成分,全文内容缺少内容连贯。

第一档(

—与所提供短文和开头语的衔接较差。

—产出内容太少,很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。

—语法结构单调,词汇项目很有限,有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误,严重影响了意义的表达。

—缺乏语句间的连接成分,全文内容不连贯。

0

白卷、内容太少无法评判或所写内容与所提供内容无关。

(1)评分原则

满分25分。 提供一段350词左右的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写(150词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。

1.本题总分为25分,按5个档次给分。

2.评分时,先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次,最后给分。

3.词数少于130的,从总分中减去2分。

5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面,评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。

6.如书写较差以致影响交际,可将分数降低一个档次。

3.读后续写评分标准解读

从官方给出的评分标准来看,读后续写在评分过程中主要受以下四个因素影响,因此,考生要格外重视:

①与题目已给信息的衔接

考生在写作最初的构思过程中,应根据上半段故事情节给出的线索以及题目给出的段首语来构不能看完故事后立刻就开始编后半部分、把自己的故事生搬硬套进两个段落里面,这样会出现衔接不当的问题

②下划线词语的应用 (仅适用浙江卷)

建议把下划线词语按照词性分成名词、形容词和副词/动词三个类别。首先推荐使用名词,因为名词类别中常出现人名或物品名,基本都是故事情节里必须用到的,所以可以先使用名词。另外需要注意的是,根据往年的阅卷反馈来看,名词单复数变化和动词时态变化可计入下划线词;但是词性变化不计人下划线词。

③词汇和语法的应用

读后续写一般为记叙性文章,阅卷时会更加重视考生对词汇和语法的掌握。评分标准里对词汇和语法的要求是∶丰富、准确。词汇的丰富指的是词汇的多样性,比如表达开心不是全文都用happy,而是使用delighted、pleased等多样的形容词,也可以用smile、lightup等多样的动词(词组)或名词来表达。语法的丰富指的是句型的多样性,全文不都是简单句,也不都是用定语从句堆叠起来的长句子,而是能够灵活地使用三大从句、非谓语、虚拟语气、倒装句、强调句等。除去词汇和语法准确的表达,正确的单词拼写、正确的时态和语态以及正确的句型应用才能让高级词汇和语法发挥出更好的作用。

④故事中的衔接成分

"衔接"这个部分,一直是所有考生最容易出现问题的地方。大部分考生在读后续写写作的初期都会只关注动作,觉得把情节写完就好了。但是只有情节,故事不一定通顺,读起来也会比较像流水账。这时候就需要加入一些衔接词,比如atthismoment,unfortunately等,来充当衔接成分,从而让情节变得更加通顺、层次丰富。

总的来说,考生若想在读后续写中拿到高分,除了简单地把故事写完、还必须要注意运用多样的词汇、句型和语法,使用至少5个下划线词语,并注意与两个段首句的衔接,以及故事情节中的衔接。

 

Part3读后续写真题解析

 

卷别

长度

体裁

     主题

2021.6浙江卷

313

记叙文

“我”的第一次工资

2021.6新高考1卷

311

记叙文

母亲节的惊喜

2021.1八省联考

332

记叙文

“我”途中车抛锚,好心的墨西哥一家人帮“我”。

2021.1浙江卷

359

记叙文

万圣节尴尬事:头卡在了南瓜中。

2020.7山东卷(新高考)

346

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卖爆米花方法救助穷人。

2020.7浙江卷

340

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拍摄北极熊遇险。

2020.1浙江卷

382

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大学生和宠物狗的离别.

2018.6浙江卷

320

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爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事。

2017.11浙江卷

338

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和父母一块去旅游的故事。

2017.6浙江卷

344

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和朋友一起骑车游玩,野外遇狼的故事。

2016.10浙江卷

332

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小两口野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路,在野外独自度夜的故事。

考试说明样卷

364

记叙文

Arthur在帮助一个年轻人时听到有人抢劫了银行,于是Arthur怀疑这个年轻人就是抢劫银行的嫌疑犯

 

读后续写(浙江卷)划线关键词分析

卷别

名词(词组)

动词(词组)

 介词(词组)

形容词

2021.6

5

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2021.1

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2020.7

7

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2020.1

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2018.6

7

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2017.11

7

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2017.6

7

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2016.10

6

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考试说明样卷

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Part4 读后续写剧情设计的“七不”

1.不增加人物。

由考纲样题及近5年高考真题中所给的段落首句可知,续写的故事情节发展都是由原文的人物所推进,因此,强行增加人物有可能会偏离情节发展

2. 不增加旁支情节。

题目要求“考生根据所给情节进行续写”,旨在延续原材料的故事情节,并不是要发展新情节。

3.不用过多对话。在续写中展示对话,虽能丰富内容和语言, 增强语篇的连贯性, 但使用过多的对话,会显得篇幅累赘且很难在限定的词数里把整个后续的情节发展补充完整。

4.不用负能量结局。结局设计绝对不能负能量。内容应该积极向上, 能增长知识或传播正能量。如样题的结尾, 我们可以有两种设定:这个年轻人就是银行抢劫者,而Arthur因此成为一个大英雄; 或者Arthur误会了这个年轻人是银行抢劫犯,但最终警察们还是表扬了他见义勇为的行为。

5.不在文末设置悬念。题目要求是“使之构成一篇完整的短文”, 若在文末设置悬念, 就会给人一种还没结束的感觉,这样的故事是不完整的。

6.不偏离原文主题。续写的情节应时刻围绕着短文的主题去推进,如上面的样题, 由续写第二段首句提到的“警察局”可推测, 我们可以围绕勇气及正义的主题去进行续写。

7.不违背逻辑常理。情节和细节的想象要合理,符合生活常识及具有逻辑性。

 

Part5 读后续写高考真题

2021年6月新高考卷(母亲节的惊喜)

A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE

The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.

The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jema found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jef turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.

Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jef to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右:

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答

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As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.

 

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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.

 

参考答案:

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As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.

“Don’t panic!” he handed each one a wet towel, helping them clean the mess quickly. After that, Jeff stammered out their plan, his face flushing. However, Father laughed, “Sounds great! I can teach you to cook.” At this, Jenna and Jef almost jumped to their feet, joy in eyes. Under his careful guidance, it didn’t take long before the French toast and chicken porridge were ready. Everything settled, Father left the kitchen, promising to keep their secret.

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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.

Meeting their smiling eyes, Mother felt confused until they presented the breakfast and said “Happy Mother’s Day”. Mother gave them a tight hug, “Unbelievable! You can cook! It’s the biggest surprise I have received.” Her face lit up with happiness. “They have known how to take care of others.” Father said in response to her excitement, winking at Jenna and Jef. They couldn’t help giggling. It was a secret only shared between them. (150 words)

2021年6月浙江卷(第一份工资)

My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.

I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and l thought that I would surpass(超过) anything he had accomplished by the time l walked across the stage at high school graduation.

Summers in the mid, 70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号).

The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and painted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.

At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earning might not be mine to do with as wished.

My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that l had to contribute my money.

 

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The pay day arrived at last.

 

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I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.

 

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The pay day arrived at last. I was glad that I finally got the payment after working hard for two weeks. While walking back home with an excited mind. I conceived many plans about how to dispose of it. I needed a new football because the old one we played had already worn out. I intended to purchase my favorite chocolates. Upon approaching the house, I noticed my dad and mom standing beside the old truck, looking sadly. It seemed as if something unpleasant happened. “How much do we still need to pay for a new truck?". asked my mother. Three hundred dollars, but we just had two hundred left.”

 

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I understood immediately what my parents were worried about. Really, the truck my dad drove often broke down on the way, which made my dad in trouble. My parents had intended to buy a new truck but couldn't afford it. Suddenly, I realized what I should do. Stepping forward, I said, “Dad, here is what I received for my work. I think it would help you a little.” A little surprised at what I said, my mom hugged me tightly. That night, before I went to bed, l thought I would tell the farmer the next day that I would continue my work, after all l grew up.

2021年1月八省联考(好心的墨西哥一家)

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

During this past year, I’ve had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK (千斤顶), and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.

He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw (锯子) from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.

I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.

The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand, but he wouldn’t take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home.

注意:

续写词数应为150左右;

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.

 

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After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.

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When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. I shook my head and said no, wondering why she asked such a question — was she going to treat me to lunch or something? “Wait a minute,” said the girl, and then she went back to the truck. After a few minutes she came back with a paper bag. “Here are some Mexican snacks and you can have some when you are hungry,” the girl smiled. I was so surprised and touched that words almost failed me. I just said a “WOW!” instead of a “Thank you!” when I took the bag.

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After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. When I saw what was in the bag, I was overcome with a mixture of respect and gratefulness. In addition to the snacks, there was the $20 bill. What a kind and respectable family! They are a perfect example of what kindness really means. And I’m sure I will pay it forward. (145)

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When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch. Of course not, for I had been trapped there for quite a few hours. She then had a word with her parents and went back to their truck. A few minutes later she came back with a paper bag. “That’s Mommy’s hand-made taco,” explained the girl. “It’s so yummy that you must love it.” I was starving to death after all that exhausting work so I took the Mexico-originated food, grateful and deeply moved. Then we waved goodbye to each other.

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After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag. Inside the bag was a chicken taco. The next few minutes saw my wolfing down the delicious food. Tears welled up as I was chewing. It was awesome to know that while many people tend to ignore those in need, there are some kind-hearted ones who go out of their way to lend a hand. The good deed the foreign family did will never escape me. I am going to pass it down to create a much friendlier world. (163)

2020年7月山东卷、海南卷(爱心爆米花)

阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。

The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.

Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.

One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy — his name was Bernard — had interested her very much.

“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.”

After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”

“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”

For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成) .”

The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”

注意:

1. 续写词数应为150左右;

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.

 

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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.

One possible version:

When Mrs. Meredith heard of the idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Then Mrs. Meredith searched the internet and ordered a household popcorn machine. After that, Mrs. Meredith, together with her three children, paid another visit to the family and told them about the popcorn plan. Needless to say, they were deeply moved, especially Bernard who finally found a way to make money for his family. A few days later, the machine was delivered to Mrs. Meredith’s doorstep. And it wasn’t long before they got the hang of using the machine to make popcorn.

With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. Although it was a hard time and things were tight for everybody, Bernard’s business worked out quite well. He carried the popcorn on his small bike, going from door to door to sell it. People were surprised to see such a little, poorly-dressed boy selling popcorn at their doors, but eventually almost all of them would buy a bag or two. It is love that makes the world go round and Bernard felt it deep in his little heart. (续写词数:164)

2021年1月浙江卷(尴尬的万圣节)

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

Pumpkin (南瓜)carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-pounder back last year.

This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.

With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.

My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;

4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. ______________________________________

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That video was posted the day before Halloween. ________________________________________________

One possible version:

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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Growing more panic, I began to cry. Fortunately, hearing me crying, dad came and helped me lay my head on the table, so my neck could rest for a while. Then he said to me “Listen, honey. I have to cut this pumpkin in half. ” I had no choice but to keep still with my eyes tightly closed and listening to the knife moving on the pumpkin. Moments later, my head was finally released from this horrible pumpkin cage. Then mom told me she had just filmed me managing to pull my head out of the pumpkin.

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That video was posted the day before Halloween. Actually my mom had asked whether she could post it on the Internet, because after all I was so embarrassed and looked so silly in it. Anyway, I nodded and supported her idea. It turned out that people liked and forwarded it crazily on the Internet,  only to make me an Internet celebrity. (续写152词)

 

2020年7月浙江卷(拍照北极熊遇险)

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.  

Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.

As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.

The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.

Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).

I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.

Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;

4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Para 1:

A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.

 

Para 2:

At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.

One possible version:

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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.

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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behindI quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene — we were robbed by a polar bear!  (续写词数:153)

2020年1月浙江卷(小狗Poppy的陪伴)

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.

His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.

The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it.” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay?” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”

The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit, Poppy didn’t.

They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried, “What should we do to cheer Poppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”

“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”

It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy

welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on

it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.

 

注意:

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;

4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared

 

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A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university.

 

Possible Version:

Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the little dog. She lowered her head to watch it curiously. Then she became so excited that she accidentally knocked over the box in an attempt to get closer. With the box tipping over, out came the little one, who was not shy and instantly got familiar with Poppy. It didn’t take long before the two played around the house, cheerfully running after each other.

A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. He had been missing his parents and the dog since it was the first time that he had been away from home for such a long time. When the boy caught sight of Poppy, he went rushing toward the dog and bent down to give her a big hug. Suddenly, the boy noticed the little dog. “Oh my god, who is this?” His parents laughed at the look of surprise on his face. “It’s Poppy’s new companion.” said Mom.   

 

Possible Version:

Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Dad put the box on the ground and opened the top. A shiny little wet nose popped up. Then two fluffy paws. Next the box tipped over sideways, and out tumbled a mass of wiggly golden silliness. Poppy was amazed. She wagged furiously. She barked with joy. She smiled, her tongue lolling out as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was not shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping around the older dog. "That didn't take long, "remarked Mom, as both dogs went roaring around the house in an impromptu game of chase. Dad laughed.

A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had missed Poppy and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down to give her a big hug, he fell over in surprise as a small golden cloud came racing up to lick his face too. "Oh my gosh, who is this? " he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the look of shock on his face. "That's Pee-wee, "said Dad. "I can't believe you got yourselves a puppy!"  "We didn't, " replied Mom. "This puppy is for Poppy!"

2018年6月浙江卷(森林遇险)

It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.

We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.

His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning. Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.

In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.

 

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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse

 

We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. 

 

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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. Dad and I found it was so cute that we decided to chase it. After a while, we were completely lost in the forest. There was nothing left in our sight but the trees. “We may not be able to make it back to the farm house in time for supper.” I thought to myself. After a series of fruitless attempts to find a way out, we felt hungry and tired.

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We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark. We got stuck in the forest. And an unexpected shower added to the difficulty of us in finding a way home, for all the tracks we had made disappeared because of the rain. I was almost on the edge of breaking down when my father said, “Don’t worry, my son. I remember there is a river near the farm house. Find the river and we will be back home.” Finally, we found the river and got back to the house along it. Needless to say, we ate a late dinner.

2017年11月浙江卷(妈妈的旅行)

A vacation with my mother

I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother — loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.

My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.

David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.

On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections. If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town. 

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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.

 

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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.

 

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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. But then we were half an hour away from the hotel, where the tent was left behind. Dad recommended buying a new one, while Mom insisted on our going back to fetch it, saying “Forgetful people like me may lose things repeatedly, so it’s unwise to give up the tent.” Finally, we got back the tent and hit the road again. If Mom hadn’t been that absent-minded, it would have saved us the trouble of going back again and again.

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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. One day, towards evening, we found a great camping site at the foot of a high mountain. David and I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mom was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an orange light over the mountains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting around the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentioned the funny incidents of the journey a pleasant smile would spread over Mom’s face. (续写词数163)

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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. To our delight, Mom gave up the idea of camping in some stranger’s backyard. Instead, we found a wonderful camping site in the wild. It was a clearing in the woods by a small lake, where Dad could catch some fish for dinner. We had no trouble setting up our tent, but we were disappointed to find that Mom forgot to pack up pillows. Needless to say, we all woke up with a sore neck the next morning.

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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. It was a fantastic trip. We crossed big rivers and vast plains, climbed high mountains, and overlooked deep valleys. During the trip, Mom’s being absent-minded not only got us into much trouble, but also gave us many funny moments. But luckily, she was not so forgetful as to leave me and David behind in the gas station bathrooms. We all arrived at grandparents’ home safe and sound. (续写词数147)

2017年6月浙江卷(骑行遇狼)

On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.

Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.

Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).

Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.

At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.

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The car abruptly stopped in front of him.

 

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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.

 

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The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed to the door of the car. But before Mac could open the door, the wolf had caught up and jumped to attack. Luckily, the magic spray saved Mac a third time. Seeing the wolf back off, Paul quickly unlocked the door, and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time, shutting the door behind him heavily. Becky looked out of the back window and saw the wolf standing over Mac’s bicycle as if it were a kill. Soon after, the animal ran off.

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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Mac got out of the car and hugged his friends. “It was really a nightmare and I thought I was going to die,” said Mac in a shaky voice, tears gathering in his eyes. For him, life could never be more beautiful. After saying goodbye to Paul and Becky with gratitude, the three men continued their trip, agreeing never to separate again.

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The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac crashed into the car with a loud bang. As a result, he fell off the bicycle and had his left ankle twisted. Hardly had Mac stood up when the wolf arrived and was about to launch another attack. Mac was going to die when suddenly the wolf was hit right on the head by a piece of rock. The wolf fell back, howling with pain. It was Paul who did this. Becky helped Mac climb into the car, while Paul kept shouting and throwing stones at the wolf.

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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They were shocked at what they saw and joined Paul. One of Mac’s friends picked out some raw meat and threw it to the wolf. Satisfied with what he got, the wolf ran into the woods. Mac thanked Paul and Becky, “How grateful I am that you stopped to save me and I owe it to you that I’m still alive.” As Mac got injured, the three men had to give up the rest of their journey and returned home.

2016年10月浙江卷(森林迷路)

One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away.

With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.

“Tom! "she cried. "Help!"

No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.

Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a streamTo her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.

As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.

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But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.

 

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   It was daybreak when Jane woke up.

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But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn't be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying." She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.

It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others' attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.

【解析】

首先,在逻辑上,要做到了合理合情:起初,主人公身陷森林,内心充满了悔恨,在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧;之后,主人公努力求生,最终获救,并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事,情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求,而且还设置了一定的悬念,增强了故事的可读性。

文章第一句 "an absolute darkness ruled the forest" 中, "rule" 一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法,让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗,同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在 "Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse…" 一句中,直接将情绪形容词放在句首,使用了非谓语动词的语法,表达精练。

此外, "There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief." 一句中,使用了几个短句,却包含了两处非谓语动词语法,同时活用了 "wear" 一词,把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。

【词汇拓展】

1) 表示并列关系的过渡词:and, as well as, or ,Not only … but also

2) 表示转折关系的过渡词:but, yet, however , although , though …

3) 表示时间关系的过渡词:first, second, third, and then, finally, after, before, after a few days, at last, at that time, later, in the past, immediately, in the meanwhile, when, while, then, after that …

 
 

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